The paper has been already been written. Unfortunately, there must be some changes made. I will provide you with the original assignment instructions and the changes you must make. You have to follow both. I will also provide you with the original essay, which has everything previously used. Continue to use the sources used in the original essay.
Original Assignment Instructions:
Write a paper of at least 900 words on ‘The Cask of Amontillado’ written by Edgar Allen Poe.
Format: APA (cover page, page numbers, in-text citations, reference page).
Sources: At least 4. You may use the story as a source.
Other Requirements: Include an in-text citation in APA format for every sentence in which you used a source. If you use a source throughout a paragraph, have an in-text citation after the first sentence and after the last sentice in the paragraph.
Write an original thesis. What did you learn or notice or realize after reading the story and doing some research?
Feedback to Follow:
Analyzing the literary elements AND the major flaws of the story is too much work. That complexity only makes the reader confused and hesitant to read.
Make things easier on yourself by being simple. Why not just analyze 3 devices Poe used or 1 device he used? Why do you have to cover both literary elements AND major flaws? Even literary devices by itself is too much.
Personally, I think major flaws is easier to do.
Don’t use the term “literary elements” because it’s vague. It’s impossible to cover the literary elements in only the introduction to The Cask of Amontillado because there are so many.
And why add on literary devices before themes? Being complicated does not impress me. Just help me understand your good ideas (the thesis and 3 major points that support it, and the evidence that proves your points.
Never go over 3 major points unless you’re writing a paper of 2,500 words or more.
Write a better and much shorter title of 1 line that’s clever in using only a few words to express your thesis. You can have fun with it by using a pun, for example.
Insert page numbers or paragraph numbers into the in-text citations that follow a quote, even a short quote.
Rewrite the lead sentence so it doesn’t sound like Wikipedia. Use your descriiptive talent and creativity to grab the reader’s attention. Use an action lead with movement, for example. Take ownership of the essay as if you are the best writer at USW.
Don’t begin sentences with “It”. Begin with the subject (noun) then the action (verb) for most of your sentences. That construction works better than any other. However, don’t use the same structure for every sentence. Add some variety. Use a mix of short, medium, and longer sentences.
The cover page title goes on the top line of Page 2.
Insert page numbers in the top right margin.
The first sentence of the 2nd paragraph is too long. Instead of the current version, say, “Vivid imagery used in The Black Cat is crucial to the story’s impact.”
Italicize short story titles, don’t use quote marks.
In the conclusion, say, “Despite some problems, The Black Cat is regarded as a classic, and continues to captivate readers.” Don’t try to say too much in one sentence.